Showing posts with label Week 2. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Week 2. Show all posts

Monday, January 30, 2017

Feedback Thoughts

The first article I chose to review was 'Silence the Critical Voices in Your Head'. I picked this article out because very often I am my own worst critic, and the people who will be more unkind to me about my work than I am are few and far between. Accordingly, I felt that reading this article would enable me to move past some of the negative thoughts I tend to have about my own work and realize that the only way I am going to be able to improve is to accept that what I do is not going to be perfect, and that is absolutely okay. It should not have to be perfect. This article was exactly what I was looking for in this respect. I had ever considered figuring out my own strengths simply to make a point of using them every day, but it does seem as though it would help to create a positive outlook on life and work. I also like the suggestion about asking for clarification on positive feedback. I think that people tend to be so afraid of looking conceited that they never stop to enjoy or look for clarification on success. They simply accept that they did not fail. I want to do more than that.

The second article 'Why Rejection Hurts So Much - and What to Do About It' offered some interesting explanations for why we let negative criticism to get to us in such a profound manner. I had no idea that we mentally registered rejection as physical pain. I thought that the offered explanation of the evolutionary benefits of responding to rejection the same way one responds to pain was incredibly interesting. What interested me more though, were the theories Guy Winch suggested regarding 'emotional first-aid'. The fact that other social activities can be used to mitigate the emotionally damaging effects of rejection makes a lot of sense. Now I know that it's okay to go eat ice cream with a friend when something someone said gets me down. In fact, it's backed by science as a surefire way to make me feel better and keep my emotional health in check.

The articles on the best way to offer criticism were also interesting. I love the concept of feedforward offered by Marshall Goldsmith's 'Try Feedforward Instead of Feedback' article. It's such a simple change from offering suggestions on how something could have been improved to how another person could potentially improve their performance in the future. The implications of that simple change, though, are enormous. People consider how they are going to change their future performance rather than dwelling on the oppressive fact of past shortcomings. I think that feedforward is a good way to teach and encourage people to do better without making them feel that they have done poorly already.

Finally, in Grant Wiggins' '7 Key Characteristics of Better Learning Feedback' I rather fixated on his concept of goal-oriented feedback. I am a passionate proponent of achievable goals, and Wiggins suggests that such goals are especially important in the case of feedback because they allow the receiver to know what to change and what to do more of in order to successfully reach the goals they set for themselves. Wiggins' article also reminded me that successful feedback is timely - a reminder I intend to take to heart. By providing prompt feedback, you allow the receiver to remember everything that they did to create what you are critiquing as well as giving them ample time to improve before they do the next related activity. I hope that I can take all of these pieces of advice to heart and craft useful feedback for my classmates during this course.



Bibliography
Silence the Critical Voices in Your Head by Sabina Nawaz
Why Rejection Hurts So Much - and What to Do About It by Guy Winch
Try Feedforward Instead of Feedback by Marshall Goldsmith
7 Key Characteristics of Better Learning Feedback by Grant Wiggins

Wednesday, January 25, 2017

Storytelling Week 2: Thataka

By the end of the twenty-first century, the world knew it was dying. There was so much hate and animosity mixed in with a deteriorating environment that the Earth simply could not support her human parasites any longer. That’s when they gave in to war.

After the nuclear war’s treacherous fallout, many of the people who weren’t killed by radiation or radiation-induced cancer began changing. Some drank blood or ate human flesh. Others simply became sadistic and violent. Many were grotesque and deformed with extra appendages and hunchbacks and fangs. The one thing they all had in common, though, was an insatiable bloodlust for vengeance against those who never had to suffer the agonizing changes they did and who, when confronted with their brothers’ new figures, ran away horrified and abandoned these Ravagers.
Of the people left unchanged, many went into hiding. Others tried to build their lives back from the ground up. After many generations, all people knew was that Ravagers and humans were enemies, meant to kill each other. Neither side remembered their common ancestry. Neither side cared.

Our story opens on, Danaia, head of a branch of the organization known as Order. Order was bent on protecting the few people left in this hull of a world from Ravagers. Danaia, like all the heads of branches, protected her charges fiercely and led merciless forces against the Ravagers. Accordingly, the people in Danaia’s district adored her; however, Danaia was, as people in cruel times are wont to do, growing old far too quickly.

To ensure the future of her district, Danaia went to her three captains, Kaush, Samit, and Kaikey, and bade them to bring her young women who might succeed her. Kaush, her most cherished captain, brought forth a beautiful woman of strong stature and steel morals. He introduced her as Rama, his most valued soldier. Samit came to Danaia with a set of twins named Luka and Shutra who looked nearly the indentical. Luka was wise and a brilliant strategist, and Shutra was clever but managed to spend most of her time in the shadows lurking while her sister spoke out. Finally, Kaikey came forward with a stern girl of 14 named Beya who could have bested a brick wall in a contest of will immobility.

Danaia looked over the four women brought to her and immediately took to them, claiming them as her own daughters and immediately training them all in earnest to one day take over the task of defending her Adaya, her district. She would one day determine her favorite and guide them to take over with her sisters as her trusted inner circle and the whole group of them trained to lead and fight as one, cohesive unit.

After a short while training her daughters, Danaia had decided: Rama would be her successor. She fought like a legend and the people of the district flocked to her, trusting her leadership against Ravagers implicitly. So when an informant named Visha came to request Rama and Luka come solve a Ravager problem at a local trading center, Danaia was all too happy to send her daughters. It would be a field test for their training and allow them to exercise their skills against Ravagers.

Visha led Rama and Luka through the carcasses of an ancient urban hub where the trading center was located. Shattered glass that had long since rotted out of frames lined the streets and shone and glittered hopefully under a midafternoon sun. They passed miles of crumbling ruins that had been hollowed out years ago by people, animals, and the elements. There were rows of crops where empty lots once stood, surrounded by chain-link fences that were one of the only well-maintained memoirs of a world long-gone. The women surveyed the enormous trading center as they saw it rising in the distance. A mostly stone building with makeshift wooden and stone patches filling holes in the wall and a sign on the side of a word that didn’t exist anymore. The thick dull-black letters read “Dil ard” to the left of the barricaded doors.
Rama and Luka turned to Visha to ask where the Ravager was holed up, but Visha only shrugged explaining that the thing would be back again by sundown to wreak more havoc, as it and its son always were. Rama and Luka nodded solemnly and took posts by the center’s entrance to wait, ready with swords and a single, rare gun in hand to fight the creature.
When the creature arrived, the two young warriors were at a momentary loss. This giant thing that had been tormenting the town was female. They turned to Visha while the creature, unmistakably a woman, was still at a distance and began to shout at her for her deception in not telling them.

Women, as the bearers of life in a dark world, were considered holy and precious especially since something in their biology had made them more capable of avoiding the transformations. Science had become myth and myth religion until women were considered holy warriors ordained and blessed by god among creation.

Visha turned away briefly and then entreated them not to be deceived. This Ravager needed to be killed or the women, children, and men she tormented would be killed in her stead. After some arguing and rage, Rama was persuaded to see reason, and when the Ravager approached the trading center, Rama fired a single shot through her head with the ancient gun she held.

Visha thanked her dearly and offered her a store of weapons hidden away in the center as a reward for her great deeds. Luka stood by and took in all that occurred, using the experience to help her grow as a leader. Eventually, Visha began to guide the two sisters home the long way, taking them through many of the district’s villages so that they could begin to know the people for whom they sacrifice.

Author's Note:

I wanted to tell an engaging story here that took root in the Ramayana but strayed away from some of the original text's character choices. I felt that in order to tell a successful story I would need to set the stage so I drew from several different early stories within the Ramayana, starting with the story of King Dashartha. While King Dashartha's story involves a flourishing kingdom with the sun always shining and imagery of flowers and birds, the best that dystopic leader Danaia can get is people who love her and trust her to protect them from Ravagers, my story's equivalent of rakshasas. I then proceed into a very loose parallel of Dashartha's sons as I tell of how Danaia has her captains select 'daughters' for her. This presenting is meant to generally reflect the ceremony conducted in order for Dashartha to have sons. I elected to make Danaia's 'daughters' already young adults to speed the storytelling process along and explain how her captains were able to make a selection. I also did this because the story I really wanted to tell was that of Rama and Lakshmana battling Thataka. I felt that my version of the story would give an interesting reason why Rama and Lakshmana were hesitant to kill a demon woman. I hope to use this story as a basis off which I can write other stories. The reason I chose to go the dystopic route is because I thought it would be fun to do an almost Bizarro-esque parallel universe sort of storytelling method. Although the good characters are, in this case, still essentially good, some of their values and character traits are different or simply emphasized differently. I hope you enjoyed reading it!




Bibliography:

All stories were drawn from the Public Domain Ramayana

King Dashartha

Dashartha's Sons

Rama: Avatar of Vishnu

Vishvamitra

Thataka

Reading Notes: Public Domain Edition Ramayana Section B

Bharata Returns
  • I was right about Bharata being really upset. 
  • I wonder why no one is willing to kill women? Is there some sort of religious significance or is it just the culture?
  • I guess that means Bharata is essentially the unwilling king-figure who walks into a world on fire.
Dashartha's Funeral 
  • The description of this funeral is really beautiful.
  • I wonder if it really was customary to lie on the ground for ten days after the death of a monarch.
  • I think the significance of this is to remind readers how important and well loved Dashartha was as a king which is why the whole world is said to darken at his death.
Rama and Bharata
  • The important point here is being good on your word. Rama told his father he would honor his wish and so he will.
  • Bharata realizes that Rama should be king but goes about convincing him all wrong.
  • If Bharata is part of Vishnu reincarnated, how can he say there is no afterlife?
The Sandals
  • Bharata has an incredible amount of loyalty for his brother to rule as an ascetic king in the woods.
  • Does this mean that Rama will be able to rule when he returns?
  • Will that be dishonoring his promise
  • I think in my story the object will be a gift rather than a pair of sandals Bharata asks Rama to wear.
Anasuya
  • I think this is meant to show how Sita, like her husband, easily wins favor and blessings from holy people.
  • It also gives some cool insight into Sita's birth story.
Viradha
  • I like this story because I feel like it's about the fact that sometimes defeat is a different kind of victory.
  • Viradha was actually cursed to be the way he was. It was defeat that freed him.
Agastya
  • Agastya is an interesting character. I find it fascinating that all the really holy sages they come across seem to already know so much about them.
  • I plan to include an Agastya character equivalent to prepare Rama for war and warn him against overtaxing his wife. 
Shurpanakha and Rama 
  • Rama is lauded as this peerless godlike virtuous man, but he clearly has human emotions and flaws too because he can be pretty cruel at times. 
  • Shurpanakha amuses me with the fact that she assumes that offering to kill his wife is the best way to win Rama's heart.
Lakshmana and Shurpanakha
  • Shurpanakha is a succubus.
  • This should be a lesson about being unnecessarily cruel.
  • I wonder why they are so opposed to killing women but not men. They could easily have killed Shurpanakha, but instead they just disfigured her. Why?
Battle with Khara
  • This is proof that Rama's training as a warrior has paid off and shows him to be valiant and indomitable. 
  • Lakshmana is very obedient to his brother. I wonder if it is because he was afraid of facing the demon army.
Shurpanakha and Ravana
  • It is clear that Ravana loves his family, if nothing else.
  • Shurpanakha really is vindictive and persistent. She's already sent two of her brothers plus an entire army to their deaths just because Sita is Rama's wife.
Ravana and Maricha
  • I didn't realize before that Maricha had good sense enough to leave well enough alone.
  • He is wiser than I thought. I almost feel bad about the fact that he's probably going to die.
  • Ravana definitely has no respect for other people's lives and experience. 
The Golden Deer
  • Sita is easily fooled it seems, and Rama is no better.
  • Lakshmana should be lauded as the wise and loyal brother.
The Chase
  • More and more I'm wanting to write a spinoff about Lakshmana, but I'm not sure if I should write something like that as incredibly wont to say 'I told you so' internally or more sage and mature.
  • Sita may be beautiful and loyal, but the way she is written makes it sound as though those are her sole redeeming characteristics.
Ravana and Sita
  • Ravana seems intent on dramaticism.
  • He could have simply stolen her from the get go.
  • Why did he think that a brahmin would be able to woo her away from her husband?
  • Ravana is foolish and rash.
Jatayu and Ravana
  • I suppose Sita also has the trait of likability as it seems that all the forest creatures love her as well as men and demons.
  • Jatayu sacrifices himself for a woman he owes nothing to. That's extremely heroic.
  • I don't know how to feel about the fact that Brahma seems to have, in some way, ordained this kidnapping.
  • Are monkeys just known for being good or is Sita offering that out on a hope that they are?
Sita in Lanka
  • So Ravana is both blessed and cursed by the same god of creation. I wonder that his misdeeds did not offer reason to revoke his blessings in the first place.
  • Sita is resolute and unyielding, if extremely emotional.
Rama and Jatayu
  • Lakshmana is far more put together than Rama in this situation.
  • He offers actual helpful suggestions and helps them to make progress.
  • Jatayu is truly selfless for using his last breaths to guide Rama in the right direction.
Kabandha
  • There seems to be a pattern of good men being turned into demons, but I can't tell if being turned into a rakshasa is a punishment from the gods or if it is a curse not a result of wrongdoing.
  • How does Kabandha know all this about Sita and Ravana?
Shabari
  • Shabari is an incredibly patient and devout woman.
  • Her devotion must have shown Rama how important his coming was to the holy people of the land.
Bibliography: Public Domain Edition Ramayana

Tuesday, January 24, 2017

Reading Notes: Public Domain Edition Ramayana Section A


King Dashartha
  • The kingdom is great and splendid and compared to a celestial city.
  • I could write a dystopic parallel depending on where the story goes from here.
  • Kashala, Dashartha's kingdom, is clearly in it's heyday what with the ruling sun-dynasty and all. 
  • I could write from the perspective of his wives who all want to bear a son for the Sun King.
Dashartha's Sons
  • I really love all the descriptive imagery using lotus blossoms and other things to emphasize appearances.
  • This chapter focuses on the horse sacrifice. This would fit really well with a dystopic turnaround.
  • Alternatively, there could be some really amazing and vivid imagery if I choose to write from one of the wive's perspective.
  • How hardcore is it that it's Kaushalya who gets to slay the horse???
Rama: Avatar of Vishnu
  • I wonder if Brahma is obligated or in any way feels obligated to offer gifts to those who offer supplications. 
  • I also wonder why Brahma cannot simply rescind his gift since it is being abused.
  • Does this strict keeping of his word in any way reflect the way that members of the upper class during that time would have been expected to keep their word no matter what?
  • I wonder if lotus flowers have religious significance in Hinduism.
  • Why is Rama special if Vishnu divided himself in four parts and was born as all the sons?
Vishvamitra
  • Why did the king promise any gift when he knew he had to keep that promise no matter what?
  • Does Vishvamitra know that Rama is the Avater of Vishnu?
  • If he knows, who else knows?
  • I wonder if there is significance to the lizard-skin gloves.
  • The brothers go to battle dressed to the nines.
Thataka
  • There is a certain sense of irony in a religious sage urging a prince to kill someone.
  • This chapter establishes Rama's heroic ability.
  • The idea of receiving servants as a show of gratitude for murder could play interestingly into that aforementioned dystopic mafia setting. 
  • I also like that setting because it helps to explore perspective and the ease with which what is good and what is evil can be manipulated by perspective.
  • I wonder about the father of Maricha
Baghiratha and Ganga
  • It's interesting that most of the people are said to spend many hundred or many thousand years in prayer to achieve their ends
  • I could incorporate the storytelling as some kind of lecture from a mob boss on the origins of the group or a landmark the group reveres in some way.
  • Why do the gods bless some who offer supplications but not all?
Ahalya
  • Rama's presence alone is enough to atone the sins of Ahalya after she cheated on her husband.
  • Maybe my main character can do something not magical (I think I'm going to go either a sci-fi or dystopic action route) like counseling the woman to make amends to her husband.
  • Basically this just needs to establish the incredible virtue of Rama.
Sita
  • Maybe in this version, Rama should be a woman so that I don't spend an entire page focused on how pretty Sita is. I could either swap Sita's gender as well or make them best friends. Alternatively, they could just both be women and fall in love. I'll have to give it more thought. I'm also not sure if I want to include the part about them being reincarnated, married gods.
King Janaka
  • Maybe in my version, I'll include Janaka giving a different kind of impossible task.
  • I also don't want the impossible task to result in marriage. Sita can choose her own fate. It will just cause Janaka to trust and accept Rama.
  • Apparently Vishvamitra is meant to be a guide of sorts in this part of the story. I may be able to use that.
Rama wins Sita
  • When Rama completes Janaka's task she can't just finish, she has to annihilate it.
  • It's interesting that all these people know Rama as incredibly virtuous, but literally faint from fear when the bow breaks.
Parashurama
  • I think my character is going to grow weary of everyone seeing fit to test her. 
  • I think it's interesting that all it took was one sign of respect for the sage to feel better.
Rama and Sita's Wedding
  • I think it's worth noting that all of Rama's brothers were married in the same ceremony he was. 
  • Was this a political play by King Dashartha to unite the two kingdoms permanently?
  • I may portray it that way in my story.
Rama the Heir Apparent
  • Rama is very popular with everyone. I guess that's a perk of being a reincarnated god.
  • I wonder how everyone can tell he is so virtuous. Does he show it on a regular basis through prayers or actions or something?
Manthara and Kaikeyi
  • Manthara is extremely vindictive for someone who was wronged once and only after she started it.
  • Kaikeyi is extremely easily led by Manthara's prodding. I think I'm going to genderswap all the roles. Dashartha is going to be a post-apocalyptic woman crime boss, and the "wives" are going to be men of different houses bringing forth women to succeed Dashartha.
  • Manthara will be either a girlfriend or a boyfriend of the Kaikeyi character.
Kaikeyi and Dashartha
  • Rather than having the characters in my story be crime lords, I think it will be more appropriate to write them as an organization of guardians. That will better explain why people behave the way they do.
  • I think it's interesting that Dashartha grants the boons but then rejects Kaikeyi and Bharata.
  • How is Bharata going to feel about that??
Rama is Banished
  • Rama is taking banishment very well for someone who was supposed to be installed as crown prince.
  • Maybe he never really wanted the job in the first place. 
  • He was incarnated to kill the demon tormenting the gods so that would make sense.
Rama Goes into Exile
  • Sita's weeping at the bark garment after she begged to go to the forest seems odd to me. I may flesh out her character a bit differently than that.
  • I will write Rama's character as serenely as he is written here, though. I like that for the story I have planned.
Crossing the River
  • Rama and Lakshmana clearly have a close relationship. I would like to add onto this scene of Lakshmana comforting Rama in his distress.
  • I may drop some of these scenes such as the one about staying with a king since my story will be shorter than this one.
Dashartha's Karma
  • It seems strange to me that Dashartha should be cosmically punished for a mistake that he owned up to and immediately tried to atone for. Yes, what happened was bad, but there was no ill intent.
Dashartha's Death
  • Dashartha really did reject Kaikeyi and Bharata after that. I would like to know how Bharata's doing. 


Bibliography: Public Domain Ramayana